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Alongside the economy, foreign humanitarian aid, and medical research, the global warming crisis has recentlly been recognized as a topic of national concern in the United States. Due to the recent severity of hurricans, solar flares, and droughts throughout the nation, industries have begun to address the epidemic as a real dilema and they have begun to seek ways to reverse or limit its impact. Leading industries in the national fields should adapt the concerns of the global warming epidemic into their personal agendas and consider how their actions will indirectly affect the economy, the environment, and international affairs, three ideas that the desired public will consider when evaluating their policies. Maybe split the last sentence into two sentences-it's a little bit long.

The current topic of the fluctuating economy is a priority that national leaders recognize when making policy changes. Do you mean need to recognize? Although they recognize that global warming is an rapidly growing issue, leaders feel as though they need address issues that are directly addressing them and their work. However, these leaders do not realize that, "the combustion of fossil fuels - coal, natural gas and petroleum - account for nearly three-quarters of carbon dioxide emissions, the primary global warming gas." (Source A) The greenhouse gases released from factories, that many companies see necessary to run a consistent business, may not presently affect their company, but they will affect their consumers in later years. This will lead to disloyalty of that company or the company's product. Elaborate on why this is so. National companies may feel anxiety to take such a risk in production alteration, however, "Eighteen states, including power hogs California and Texas, have set requirements or goals for renewable energy." (Source C) Thus, such large industries would not be taking the first steps, but they would be following in a revolution of global health production. Switching to green product composition, such as wind powered technology, would also provide the same rapid pace of production of goods while also attracting customers who are environmentally active. This would provide more money into the flow of the economy, thus helping balance the current inconsistent economic state. Try and tie this back into the idea of the leaders making policies.

The stability of the natural environment is slowly falling apart as Americans' wastefulness continue to increase. Even though consumers and political executives realize that they are damaging the little environment Americans have left, because they are not directly witnessing the destruction, they neglect to admit that acts like littering will cause a big effect in the large scheme of global warming. Although this is a constant answer, the facts reveal that, "protection and restoration of forests may be able to offset up to 10 percent of carbon dioxide emissions over the next 50 years." (Source A) Not all Americans are emotionally attached to the environment, yet all Americans support the idea of creating a better future for their children. If policy makers provide an emotional target with the demand to recycle or use green products, they will get better feedback from their consumers and better statistics of a healthier environment. Leaders in industries must also consider that their actions could be, "tearing apart...communities of animals," some full of, "species [that are] going to be, " (Source F) extinct in as little as a decade. We live in a world where we are dependent on other species, even if we may not realize it. What affects one species detrimentally will ultimately end up affecting us all one way or another.Thus, to promote this idea of chain reactions, national associations such as PETA should release commercials stating cold, hard evidence that persuades the general public and gains support to save withering populations of animals.

International affairs and humanitarian aid are ideals that American policy makers take very seriously when establishing national agendas. Multinational companies need to be wary that they are not overspending and that they are producing their products safely. However, because they United States chooses not to agree to the Kyoto Protocol, THANK YOU FOR SPELLING PROTOCOL CORRECTLY. "multinational companies will have to cut carbon dioxide emissions or pay to pollute at the old rate, bolstering the market for pollution-control gear." (Source C) To put it simply, the United States will be paying extra money that it does not have. Thus America needs to stabilize its financial and environmental conflicts before dealing with multinational issues. To add onto that argument, critics of the stabilization of America before participating in humanitarian aid believe that we can't, "ensure that the Third World develops as rapidly as possible, while preventing a massive explosion in production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases." (Source E) However, these critics neglect to recognize that slow industrial development will worsen global warming in Third World countries. America will adapt more quickly to a green lifestyle than assisting countries whose lifestyles will take decades to reconstruct. Overall, political policy makers should consider the current state of America before involving itself into humanitarian aid. To what does "itself" refer? The policy makers or America? Either way, I would replace it with another word. If you mean it to refer to policy makers, change it to "themselves"; if you mean it to refer to America, change it to "the country", or something along those lines.

Leaders should strongly consider the future of global warming when establishing their personal agendas and policies. Although the process is tedious, the benefits would be unfathomable. Delaying the implementation of global warming in future policies would lead to eventual destruction of our race and our world. Flesh out the conclusion!

Overall I think this is a strong essay. You definitely read the prompt and took your own spin on things, which is good. My one last comment would be that you get a bit comma-happy sometimes, so be careful of that. I know it's hard (I overuse them too). Just check before putting a comma in and ask yourself if it's necessary.