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Synthesis Essay--Global Warming

Global warming creates many key issues [the parentheses are not necessary. Furthermore, you do not need specific examples in the first sentence...these specific issues should be addressed later in the paper] (such as a raise in temperature, the extra amount of CO2 in the air, and an effect on the economy) that need to be addressed. The approaches <-- wrong word here. maybe use considerations instead? that should be considered when addressing these issues are how people will perceive the idea what idea? you can't reference something you haven't talked about yet. and how to effectively implement them AGAIN...NO PARENTHESES! :) (the ideas) into our try not to use first person words such as our...this is a formal essay. daily lives to help slow down the process of Global Warming.

You need to be clearer on what exactly you're talking about. While it may make sense in your head, the reader needs to know what the "ideas" are. "Global Warming" shouldn't be capitalized.

The raise rise not raise in CO2 emissisons has risen a lot redundant. try not to repeat yourself. within the past few years. As a result, the idea of using "fuel-saving technologies and renewable energy is...getting more compelling" (Source C). With this approach, the automobile industry percieves it be more clear here...replace it w/these new innovations as a great way to earn profit. In this way stronger transition please. maybe try consequently the economy woul don't forget the d in would also improve as more jobs would be provided to the people and last but not least, this is a run on sentence. try to break it up to allow for clarity and flow this new product would allow less CO2 emission this is plural and help to stop the speed at which Global warming is advancing. Deforestation is also a cause of increase in CO2 emissions and if it were possible to restore the forests and protect them, 20 percent of CO2 emissions could be offset over the next 50 years (Source A). With this information in mind, politicians could find a way to help fund a government program (like the EPA) in which replace in which to w/ that could to protect the trees and help lessen the CO2 emissions. This approach could help appeal to politicians as it would give them credit for helping a universal cause.

Your topic sentence is not very powerful, and does not completely relate back to the argument. It's not a big deal, but you should say Carbon dioxide instead of CO2, or at least write it like this: Carbon dioxide (CO2).

The issues of cost and development also come into play in the effort to lessen the advancement of Global warming. With money in mind, people would have to find a way to appeal to all nations, even Third World nations and make sure that the idea that is going to help stop global warming can also be used by them as they may not be able to develop as quickly (Source E). But how would public support persuade third world nations/all nations to contribute to global warming causes? Where would the money come from and how would it be allocated to different aspects of global warming crises? Try to expand on your argument and address the current flaws within the system (i.e. it's not feasible to say that third world countries would readily contribute if they don't have the money to). With the method of building more fuel-saving technologies as mentioned above, people would be able to improve the economy and gain money while helping to slow down the effects that quicken the proccess of Global warming. This seems like a separate topic... either expand on this in regards to "development" as a key issue or move this to a new paragraph and talk about it there.

With these issues in mind, people would need to come up with solutions that could best support their nation to stop Global warming. CO2 emissions can be fixed by helping the economy and the high temperatures can be lessened in this way too. Your conclusion is a little bit redundant. Yes, global warming solutions should be lessening the effects of global warming. Instead, try to talk about your designated key issues and how they are more important or more effective than other issues.