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Only YOU (global leaders) Can Prevent Global Warming

Use present tense throughout the whole essay; dont switch tenses The issue of global warming has been one of the hottest (no pun intended) this is informal and i think that you shouldnt try to make the readers laugh, you should blow them away with an amazing essay issues of the past 10 years. It has forced global leaders of just about every nation to put the welfare of the world on a scale and come up with a balancing act of legislation that both stabilizes the environment and retains the integrity of both national and international economics. When global leaders make these crucial legislative decisions, the must take into account the economic ramifications that they may have, but also the future environmental and social welfare of the planet as a whole. Proof read it because you have many grammatical errors Sounds very smart, though there are some grammatical errors. The intro is alright though a little cheesy.

Check back and go take out the words that are useless. e.g. "speaking" in the next sentence. This will help shorten your essay, thus getting to the point much faster. Economically speaking, environmental awareness is an inefficient, costly, and ultimate profit reducing business practice that, while necessary, plagues business owners and governments all over the world. Both national and "multinational companies will have to cut CO2 emissions or pay to pollute at the old rate." [source C] This seemingly small arrangement will certainly have huge economic ramif ﻿ ications for every facet of global life. This will increase prices for running businesses (both large and small) and will decrease their efficiancy in producing their products, which in turn will raise the prices that these products cost. This increase in cost will force consumers to reconsider purchasing many of the "non-essential" items that they are used to purchasing, which will lead to a huge drop in demand for products of just about every nature. This decrease in demand will soon shut down large numbers of businesses creating a cataclysm of capitalism that's effects will be seen throughout the world. However, these negative ramifications can be combated. Firstly, companies must find more efficient and environmentaly concious ways to produce, effectively forcing progress in the way we do business. Though, most importantly these economic issues can be tackled through global cooperation and teamwork. The cost of combating global warming worldwide is about $8 trillion, which seems like a hefty sum of money (it is almost three times the United States national debt!), but in reality it is only "2% of the worlds GDP." [source E] This is not a huge percentage if we consider the world as a whole, and "as long as the world economy continues to grow by 2-3% per year, as predicted" [source E] this loss will be soon paid off, and the positive example and effects it will have on future generations will be, almost, priceless. The wording sounds a bit awkward. Try rewording some of the sentences.

Proof read your whole paper, you have many grammatical errors. I suggest reading it out loud. When a leader is making legislation about global warming they must, obviously, consider what a huge issue it really is; it is the life or death of our planet. In other words, global economics won't matter if the global economy no longer exist. The foreshadowing of this can already be seen as science suggests that over the course of the nest century, there will be "an average temperature increase of 1.4-5.8 degrees Celsius, a sea level rise in the order of a meter, significant changes in weather patters" [source E] which will lead to "extreme climate events." Global leaders must take this into account because this is the highest price we could possibly pay. These weather anomalies could lead to countless numbers of coastline-city destruction and human deaths. Fortunately, there are relatively simple solutions. Deforestation is one of the largest CO2 emitting practices on the globe, accounting for "one-quarter of carbon dioxide emission." [source A] This startling statistic should open the eyes of leaders across the globe, forcing them to create legislation that drastically cuts the rate of global deforestation. It has been concluded that "protection and restoration of forests may be able to offset up to 20% of carbon dioxide emissions over the next 50 years." [source A] This huge cut in CO2 emissions could count as one of the critical pieces of environmental salvation. This, coupled with greener business practices, and global economic cooperation could reverse the effects of global warming, and save the planet we call home. I agree with the previous statement, try reading it out loud. Try also using more sources in each paragraph.