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Global warming has been a prevalent issue of debate for about the last decade. Statistics show that it's﻿ (1) problems are not made up- real changes are effecting our world in many areas. Leaders around the world need to work together as they focus in on the economic, environmental, and social effects of global warming. (1) Don't use conjunctions The thesis has a really great start. However....you said that "leaders around the world need to work together." But for what reason? they need to work together to.... or they need to work together by.

Global warming effects (affects)﻿ the economy on a global, domestic, and personal level. The Kyoto Protocol "has kicked in- with 34 industrialized nations legally bound to cut emissions" (Fonda). Immediately after cutting these emissions, businesses will take a hard hit. Until they get the hang [Too colloquial]﻿ ﻿ of renewable energy, as mentioned by Fonda, maybe ["maybe" is unnecessary] businesses will not be able to produce their goods as efficiently. For a while, this will slow down our domestic economy, but it will eventually force businesses to learn to be more efficient using only renewable energy. Until all of these adjustments are made and have time to set in, prices will rise and consumers will not have as much freedom to buy what they are used to buying. A personal level of economy will thus be affected, in addition to the domestic economy of our businesses. <---I like I like =) On a positive note, once these changes are set in place, our industries will be producing goods in a [plural-no definite article] much more environmentally friendly ways. The production process will also be cheaper using renewable energy, since "oil and gas prices [are reaching] record levels" (Fonda). Adjustments to our own industries may lead on changes in the global market, which brings up a question regarding the World GDP. Is the "money we plan to spend on stabilizing global warming" put to better use by "alleviating current global suffering" (Maslin)? When one considers the fraction of money that is needed to save our climate, it is impossible to turn the spending down. Stabilizing global warming would only cost "2% of the World's GDP" (Maslin). This statistic shows an extremely miniscule loss that will result in an un-proportional worldly gain. Leaders should look towards these simple economic fixes when deciding how to combat global warming. <--This sentence is amazing =).

It seems like you didn't put in enough thought into organization. I say this because I feel like you shouldn't have been able to have just one paragraph on the global, domestic, and personal levels of effects of global warming (wow I need to work on rewording). Your arguments are good, but maybe you should elaborate more, and spend more thought on organization to make your paper more meaningful, because at this point, I can't really tell what you're arguing, or suggesting, or trying to prove. Your last sentence was very strong, and I wish that your topic sentence and thesis could've had the same "economic fix" theme.

Global warming, of course, is creating major problems with our environment, and these environmental changes will hurt the social system of all groups of people. [How will it hurt the social system?] "Approximately one quarter of all carbon dioxide is caused by deforestation," but when considered closely, "protection and restoration of forests" is a relatively easy fix (Kyoto). Maslin reported that "up to a 60% global cut is required to prevent major climate change," so the 20% cut from preservation of forests will put a huge leg up to the required 60%. If we begin to change our societies views on deforestation now, the society 50 years from now will look at it in a very different, negative light. There have also been a number of significant changes in our normal seasonal structure that will have a huge affect to our society. Now that "mother nature has rushed spring forward by nearly 10 days worldwide," changes in our culture will begin to emerge (Borenstein). Cultural traditions, such as the cherry blossoms in Washington, will be on a different time table, forcing many changes in our annual culture (Borenstein). Leaders should look towards the effects that changing environment characteristics will have on the future of society.