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﻿ For the past decades, scientists have monitored the continuity and changes in the climates of different regions all over the world Judging from past weather-related extremes (such as the ice ages), the changes in the Earth's climate suggest symptoms of climate-related calamity. Ever since the industrialization of nations, excess carbon dioxide has been released, temperatures have generally been rising, many species are dying out, and water levels are rising exponentially. This sentence uses several different tenses- past tense twice, then present progressive twice It is easy for the public to ask for a greener America, but for politicians, pro-environment laws and budgets are not too easy to pass nor are they cheap. To fulfill hopes of a healthier environment as well as maximum economic efficiency, politicans must be weary of both positions. In our current national debt, we cannot afford to go completely green. Politicians should frame policies to initially encourage industrial growth. When the economy is at a generally accepted high standing, politicans mus curb their policies for greener methods of industrializing. Combine these short sentences, your thesis is unclear and it's hard to tell what the paragraphs will be about

We have already witnessed a great change as a result of human interference with the environment. don't use the personal pronoun "we" keep it objective The combustion of fossil fuels makes up three-quarters of carbon dioxide emissions, deforestation results in about a quarter of the carbon dioxide (source A) and the average surface temperature of the oceans (globally) has risen from 1.2 degrees Celcius to 0.25 degrees Celcius, marking a relatively enormous change in a usually static nature (source B). Split up the two quotations into seperate sentences, and then expand upon them. You have no analysis for this paragraph, tell why it's detrimental that the temperature is rising

Despite all the detriments that industrialization has towards the environment, the economy is just as important to human life as the environment is. As Bjorn Lomberg puts it, we believe we have "an inescapable choice between higher economic welfare and a greener environment" (Source D). Yet, ot counter this fixed dilemma, he illustrates a real world application in which "when we do the dishes, we are aiming...to dilute the dirt to an acceptable degree" instead of completely cleaning them. Like washing dishes, we cannot expect to be so orderly that Earth and its environment are not all bad; such changes are needed to run their natural course.

Global warming/global climate change is real and does indeed a threat to our ways of living. don't use slash marks, actually put it into words Yet, politicans must have open minds, to create policies that allow companies to grow, so that, in the near future, we can afford to go completely green with financial security-while also not obsessively and compulsively controlling nature.

You make a strong argument in your introduction but then lose steam and analysis throughout the rest of the essay. If you build up your body paragraphs with some quotes (I suggest at least one per paragraph) and analysis this will become a solid essay.