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GLOBAL WARMING <--- VERY ORIGINAL TITLE ;D

Forty million years ago, during the Middle Eocene period a dangerous buildup of permanent ice sheets was caused by an increase in carbon dioxide. This disatrous natural happening could occur again, now. Global warming is a serious issue, with large detrimental affects on the Earth, but with proper action, these effects can be curtailed. I like that you open your essay through a historical context, but it'd be better if you could elaborate a bit more on the "disastrous natural happening".

Your thesis is a bit vague, and it'd be better if you talked about what those "proper actions" and "effects" are. But it's a really great start =)

Global warming is a serious and very real issue. In recent years the average temperature of the Earth's oceans have risen at the fastest rate in over one thousand years (Kyoto). These rising temperatures are completely incongruent with the trend of decreasing temperatures that was expected. This rising temperature is verified with the early spring arrival in 2005. Spring came 10 days earlier than it should have and caused "Washington's signature cherry trees to bloom about a month earlier than they did a half-century ago," (Borenstien). The full effects of global warming are not known, but whatever they are, the effects are going to be massive.

The thing is, you repeated the phrase "global warming is a serious issue". Nice vocab: incongruent I like that you're connecting information from different sources to prove that global warming is dramatically affecting climate and behavioral patterns. Your conclusion sentence kind of destroyed your affirmative stance about global warming being a serious issue :/ I think you were trying to create an ominous tone? You should elaborate on the KNOWN effects of global warming, and say that THOSE are massive and serious, and there could be even MORE reprecussions in the near future.

To slow the rate of global warming, measures involving fossil fuel consumption and deforestation must be taken. As of right now, if two percent of the world GDP is invested in "preventing a massive explosion of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases," the world would be able to greatly reduce disastrous events (Maslin). This money would only work if it went toward the right projects though. It could be used towards finding "fuel-saving technology and renewable energy," and realistic pledges to "curb greenhouse gases," (Fonda). Eight trillion dollars would allow for projects to occur with much success all over the world. Another solution could be to restore and protect forests. A huge mount of the accumulation of carbon dioxide is caused by deforestation, and with restoration twenty percent of carbon dioxide emissions could be reduced over the next fifty years (Kyoto). The Amazon rain forest is the world's largest rain forest and if it was restored to its original size the amount of carbon dioxide it could filter would take away almost a quarter of the carbon dioxide. The responsible spending of the proper amount of money could save the Earth.

♥ your topic sentence. That's the kind of material you should put in your thesis!

Global warming can be fixed and it is one of the most serious problems afflicting the world. The planet has natural cycles of heat and cold, but this is man-made. It is the responsibility of the inhabitants of the Earth to save it from being hurt.

You should try to just WRITE MORE. elaborate, talk about the other "problems afflicting the world" and how we can address global warming in addition to all the other "stuff". TEACH US HOW TO MULTITASK! =)